Dear Tolu,

The small snippets of writing I’ve heard from you in class was enough to make me love your writing. Your sweet personality and pleasant vibe is reflected in your writing through a subtle gentleness and calmness. In regards to this piece, I really loved how you presented a rather difficult state of mind with ease and gentle transitions. Furthermore, I am a huge fan of small fragmented sentences, which you utilized expertly. The stylistic choice of avoiding punctuations was an excellent choice as well for it added to the overall tone you had created.

As for improvements, I don’t want to suggest anything that might take away from this piece. However, I think it would be nice if you added an explanation at the end. We each have our own interpretation to the same piece, and I’m really curious to know the story from the perspective of the author.

Thank you so much for this magical experience and I will for sure be backing to read more!

With lots of Love,
Hefseeba